Been stuck a little bit, so sketched the plot and charted it, then decided to make a few radical changes.
1. Completely remove The General from the entirety of the book. (Not counting the Dream scene - because writing luuuuv is always better when the guy looks like the General.)
2. Never describe the appearance of the female chars and only call the men pretty (or prissy or spiffy), stressing how much you mock them for bothering.
3. Leave all of the revelations until the very very last scene - and DON'T reveal Startracker #2 at all, not even to the audience...
* Mental note, do find the blueprints for the wheels and levers so as to make sure they're actual...
4. Avoid costumography, other than the button dress...
5. Introduce the hints of entirely new characters, mainly other book thieves... (Camille? Antagonists? Why? Hm...)
6. Hint and only hint at all the sex from such a distance, people won't even understand what they're reading. Trust me, it's better. There's immorality and then there's immorality overly bragged about...
7. Oh, and - no. 'Nasty Little Light' chapter isn't coming included. Reasons.
1. Completely remove The General from the entirety of the book. (Not counting the Dream scene - because writing luuuuv is always better when the guy looks like the General.)
2. Never describe the appearance of the female chars and only call the men pretty (or prissy or spiffy), stressing how much you mock them for bothering.
3. Leave all of the revelations until the very very last scene - and DON'T reveal Startracker #2 at all, not even to the audience...
* Mental note, do find the blueprints for the wheels and levers so as to make sure they're actual...
4. Avoid costumography, other than the button dress...
5. Introduce the hints of entirely new characters, mainly other book thieves... (Camille? Antagonists? Why? Hm...)
6. Hint and only hint at all the sex from such a distance, people won't even understand what they're reading. Trust me, it's better. There's immorality and then there's immorality overly bragged about...
7. Oh, and - no. 'Nasty Little Light' chapter isn't coming included. Reasons.
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